Archive for June 26th, 2011
Saul is hot. Saul is cold. Saul wants to skip like one of the nerdcore kids. Saul is holding Kate Gerlacki’s hand. Kate Gerlacki is wearing her dress with the roses on the front, the one that goes down to her knees. Saul wants to lift the dress up and feel what is underneath. Or even have the wind come up and do it for him. See if she wears a thong or granny panties or nothing at all.
I have been sitting on this one for about three weeks. When I first wrote it, I didn’t feel comfortable posting it, so I wrote another one. Reading this one today, I wonder: what was I worried about?
Tonight I had my pals at Shelter Sundays read it aloud and give me feedback. The physicality in the story bothered no one, but they still had things to say.
I fixed the easy stuff. The deeper issues I have not addressed. The experience reminds me how bad I am at revisions: I so fear breaking what works that I hesitate to change much–at least after the first creative impulse has passed.
Don’t get me wrong. I still think it’s a pretty good story. I hope you’ll read it, here.